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Things I can't describe
Emotions I cannot hide
Will I ever be okay
I'm falling back to who I use to be
Who I still am

It's the old me again
Oh how I've missed you so!
But are you gonna drag me down again?
Like before?

I don't have to welcome you back
You just barge right in
But things have changed now
There's no one there to hold me tight anymore
So be extra careful with me now
I may be more fragile than you knew me

So hello sweet misery
Are you back to stay?
Please let me know, give me a sign
So I know if I should clear a room for you
So I can plan out the rest of my life
Just please don't be catching me by surprise
Just wrote this at the moment right now. I'm semi inspired at the moment, something I haven't been for a while so I thought I should take advantage before this spark fades. Otherwise I have no telling when it'd be back. This is basically me right now. I've been declining these past few weeks. I feel my meds wearing off. So yeah, here it is raw and personal. I don't really have much else to say at the moment....

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frogiful1 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012
I kind of like the subject matter, even standing alone (reading the poem before reading your muse). I saw a few grammatical problems and at least a couple instances where I personally would have used slightly different wording that I don't want to get into unless you wanted the more in-depth critique.
Other than that, I don't know if my own personal feelings towards free verse or the construction itself kept me from becoming more engrossed in the poem. If not for the subject matter then I honestly couldn't be sure how truly interested I would be in it. I do enjoy how you brought to life a subject that is so alive yet realistically void of life.
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EvenDeathLies Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! I really appreciate your critique :heart: :thanks: :hug:
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